申請(qǐng)英國(guó)大學(xué)的personal statement需要注意的問題
10-04, 2015
申請(qǐng)英國(guó)大學(xué)時(shí)候，personal statement是必備的申請(qǐng)材料，它對(duì)于最后的申請(qǐng)結(jié)果是至關(guān)重要的，寫的好申請(qǐng)就容易成功，寫不好就容易被拒。
有人覺得個(gè)人陳述personal statement寫得太好容易遭到質(zhì)疑，這首先要明確，英國(guó)大學(xué)申請(qǐng)過程中， personal statement最重要的目的是為了讓招生委員會(huì)更深入、更全面地了解申請(qǐng)人的情況。所以這種personal statement的內(nèi)容不應(yīng)該是申請(qǐng)學(xué)生的簡(jiǎn)單背景介紹或者學(xué)習(xí)成績(jī)的機(jī)械羅列，而是著重應(yīng)該寫學(xué)生的思考、觀察、反省以及從經(jīng)歷中所學(xué)到的東西。
但是一個(gè)常見的問題是，當(dāng)一名申請(qǐng)者的TOEFL/SAT寫作部分得分不高，而所遞交的申請(qǐng)personal statement如果寫得太好，是不是反而會(huì)讓招生委員會(huì)質(zhì)疑呢?這種擔(dān)心很多人都有，尤其是在學(xué)生找他人修改過personal statement后，更加會(huì)心里沒底，學(xué)生往往無所適從，不知道 personal statement寫到什么程度為好。甚至有人建議，如果TOEFL/SAT寫作部分的成績(jī)不佳，寫申請(qǐng)personal statement的時(shí)候還要故意降低寫作水平來增加內(nèi)容的可信性。
在國(guó)外大學(xué)本科招生委員會(huì)閱讀學(xué)生personal statement的時(shí)候，有的admission officer會(huì)在學(xué)生的材料上批注一個(gè)符號(hào)“DDI”，意思是說，daddy did it.也就意味著，招生委員會(huì)認(rèn)為這個(gè)申請(qǐng)材料是孩子的爸爸(或者其他成年人)幫助寫成的。這樣一來，其內(nèi)容的可信程度就大打折扣了。所以如果 TOEFL/SAT寫作部分的得分不高，在personal statement的寫作過程中要小心用詞遣句，假設(shè)學(xué)生找一個(gè)英美文學(xué)的高手來代筆，寫得出神入化，有時(shí)可能效果還適得其反。
也有人認(rèn)為寫personal statement要深思熟慮盡情發(fā)揮。其實(shí)TOEFL/SAT寫作部分和英國(guó)大學(xué)本科的申請(qǐng)personal statement無論從內(nèi)容、題材、常用結(jié)構(gòu)，都是截然不同的，大多數(shù)時(shí)候這兩者并沒有可比性，也沒有必然的聯(lián)系。TOEFL/SAT寫作部分更多像是應(yīng)用文寫作或是格式固定的寫作，要求在規(guī)定的很短時(shí)間內(nèi)表達(dá)學(xué)生的觀點(diǎn)，這一點(diǎn)，考察的是學(xué)生將來在英國(guó)大學(xué)中學(xué)習(xí)的潛力。事實(shí)上，將來進(jìn)入大學(xué)，課堂中很常見的one-page paper，就是那種要求短時(shí)間完成的一頁(yè)紙的小短文essay，和TOEFL/SAT寫作部分中的要求與格式是極為類似的。而申請(qǐng)personal statement則考察學(xué)生在深思熟慮之后，對(duì)自我情況的一種把握能力，也就是所謂的self-mastery，這一點(diǎn)要求很高，也是學(xué)生成熟度的一個(gè)體現(xiàn)。在對(duì)自身有深刻認(rèn)識(shí)的前提之下，寫出的文章自然用詞精準(zhǔn)，句式多變，有思想深度。這種文章，某種程度上像是學(xué)生將來學(xué)成工作后，對(duì)真實(shí)世界的一個(gè)深度剖析。因此，兩類文章在結(jié)構(gòu)安排、邏輯呼應(yīng)、詞句選擇上有所區(qū)別，也是完全可以理解的。
所以說，以上兩類文章各有側(cè)重，也給那些因?yàn)榉N種原因TOEFL/SAT寫作部分發(fā)揮不好，沒有取得滿意成績(jī)的學(xué)生另一個(gè)機(jī)會(huì)，在申請(qǐng) personal statement中作出彌補(bǔ)。下面提供一篇范文供參考：#p#分頁(yè)標(biāo)題#e#
Business and law personal statement
Academically, I have always been a very determined and studious individual, hence why I knew that a degree at University would be the definite next step. I have a broad interest in many subject areas yet feel drawn towards a law or business orientated degree. With regards to Business, the reasoning behind my choice is the complex and intriguing nature of the subject. I particularly enjoy the way business so appropriately blends in with everyday issues. Since taking the subject at A-Level my interest has grown and matured and I am able to view many businesses analytically and make suggestions regarding possible improvements. Law is an area which has interested me from an early age. I enjoy extensive reading and recognise that this is essential in studying law. I consider myself to be well suited to a career in law as I pay much attention to detail and take pleasure in undergoing work which raises social issues in today’s society and requires the skill to manipulate evidence and present persuasive arguments. I also believe that the Psychology A-Level I have has aided me in observing the actions of others and how their opinions and memories are influenced by external factors. This area of work requires much confidence which I believe I posses and can use to my advantage in order to gain recognition in this competitive field of work.
My work experience is very broad due to a variety of positions I have held in differentiating working environments. My experience working for Royal Worchester & Spode in the Debenhams’ department store has been the most influential. The up-market company requires a confidant disposition from a Sales Advisor such as myself and a proficient memory in order to ensure product knowledge is to an optimum standard. I was also given the responsibility to train a new employee which displays the high degree of trust my employers have for me.
My educational experiences have been of great use to me from a position of form captain in Secondary School to aiding the organisation of mass celebrations in College. Responsibilities such as these have helped me to mature and take my positions seriously so that I am respected by staff. My position of English Prefect in Year 11 required a large portion of my time as I was in charge of aiding the entire English department. My interest in the Italian language has also led me to have an article I wrote regarding the exploitation of women on Italian Television published in ‘L’Italiano’ newspaper, to which I was very content to have my views expressed.
During Secondary School I also attended evening Italian classes where I was presented with ‘The Student of the Year Award’ due to my excellent standard of work. The class required me to organise my time efficiently so that other schoolwork did not suffer as a result of my extra GCSE. As a result of these classes and of my Italian parents I now speak the language fluently.#p#分頁(yè)標(biāo)題#e#
Sport and leisure also interests me and during college I decided to use this interest to do charity work for RNIB where I raised £250 and abseiled 120ft down Westminster University. I played Netball for the Harrow Netball Team and competed in the OGI UK Games for the Harrow and Wembley team where I was awarded several trophies and a gold and bronze medal for long jump and javelin.
有人覺得個(gè)人陳述personal statement寫得太好容易遭到質(zhì)疑，這首先要明確，英國(guó)大學(xué)申請(qǐng)過程中， personal statement最重要的目的是為了讓招生委員會(huì)更深入、更全面地了解申請(qǐng)人的情況。所以這種personal statement的內(nèi)容不應(yīng)該是申請(qǐng)學(xué)生的簡(jiǎn)單背景介紹或者學(xué)習(xí)成績(jī)的機(jī)械羅列，而是著重應(yīng)該寫學(xué)生的思考、觀察、反省以及從經(jīng)歷中所學(xué)到的東西。
但是一個(gè)常見的問題是，當(dāng)一名申請(qǐng)者的TOEFL/SAT寫作部分得分不高，而所遞交的申請(qǐng)personal statement如果寫得太好，是不是反而會(huì)讓招生委員會(huì)質(zhì)疑呢?這種擔(dān)心很多人都有，尤其是在學(xué)生找他人修改過personal statement后，更加會(huì)心里沒底，學(xué)生往往無所適從，不知道 personal statement寫到什么程度為好。甚至有人建議，如果TOEFL/SAT寫作部分的成績(jī)不佳，寫申請(qǐng)personal statement的時(shí)候還要故意降低寫作水平來增加內(nèi)容的可信性。
在國(guó)外大學(xué)本科招生委員會(huì)閱讀學(xué)生personal statement的時(shí)候，有的admission officer會(huì)在學(xué)生的材料上批注一個(gè)符號(hào)“DDI”，意思是說，daddy did it.也就意味著，招生委員會(huì)認(rèn)為這個(gè)申請(qǐng)材料是孩子的爸爸(或者其他成年人)幫助寫成的。這樣一來，其內(nèi)容的可信程度就大打折扣了。所以如果 TOEFL/SAT寫作部分的得分不高，在personal statement的寫作過程中要小心用詞遣句，假設(shè)學(xué)生找一個(gè)英美文學(xué)的高手來代筆，寫得出神入化，有時(shí)可能效果還適得其反。
也有人認(rèn)為寫personal statement要深思熟慮盡情發(fā)揮。其實(shí)TOEFL/SAT寫作部分和英國(guó)大學(xué)本科的申請(qǐng)personal statement無論從內(nèi)容、題材、常用結(jié)構(gòu)，都是截然不同的，大多數(shù)時(shí)候這兩者并沒有可比性，也沒有必然的聯(lián)系。TOEFL/SAT寫作部分更多像是應(yīng)用文寫作或是格式固定的寫作，要求在規(guī)定的很短時(shí)間內(nèi)表達(dá)學(xué)生的觀點(diǎn)，這一點(diǎn)，考察的是學(xué)生將來在英國(guó)大學(xué)中學(xué)習(xí)的潛力。事實(shí)上，將來進(jìn)入大學(xué)，課堂中很常見的one-page paper，就是那種要求短時(shí)間完成的一頁(yè)紙的小短文essay，和TOEFL/SAT寫作部分中的要求與格式是極為類似的。而申請(qǐng)personal statement則考察學(xué)生在深思熟慮之后，對(duì)自我情況的一種把握能力，也就是所謂的self-mastery，這一點(diǎn)要求很高，也是學(xué)生成熟度的一個(gè)體現(xiàn)。在對(duì)自身有深刻認(rèn)識(shí)的前提之下，寫出的文章自然用詞精準(zhǔn)，句式多變，有思想深度。這種文章，某種程度上像是學(xué)生將來學(xué)成工作后，對(duì)真實(shí)世界的一個(gè)深度剖析。因此，兩類文章在結(jié)構(gòu)安排、邏輯呼應(yīng)、詞句選擇上有所區(qū)別，也是完全可以理解的。
所以說，以上兩類文章各有側(cè)重，也給那些因?yàn)榉N種原因TOEFL/SAT寫作部分發(fā)揮不好，沒有取得滿意成績(jī)的學(xué)生另一個(gè)機(jī)會(huì)，在申請(qǐng) personal statement中作出彌補(bǔ)。下面提供一篇范文供參考：#p#分頁(yè)標(biāo)題#e#
Business and law personal statement
Academically, I have always been a very determined and studious individual, hence why I knew that a degree at University would be the definite next step. I have a broad interest in many subject areas yet feel drawn towards a law or business orientated degree. With regards to Business, the reasoning behind my choice is the complex and intriguing nature of the subject. I particularly enjoy the way business so appropriately blends in with everyday issues. Since taking the subject at A-Level my interest has grown and matured and I am able to view many businesses analytically and make suggestions regarding possible improvements. Law is an area which has interested me from an early age. I enjoy extensive reading and recognise that this is essential in studying law. I consider myself to be well suited to a career in law as I pay much attention to detail and take pleasure in undergoing work which raises social issues in today’s society and requires the skill to manipulate evidence and present persuasive arguments. I also believe that the Psychology A-Level I have has aided me in observing the actions of others and how their opinions and memories are influenced by external factors. This area of work requires much confidence which I believe I posses and can use to my advantage in order to gain recognition in this competitive field of work.
My work experience is very broad due to a variety of positions I have held in differentiating working environments. My experience working for Royal Worchester & Spode in the Debenhams’ department store has been the most influential. The up-market company requires a confidant disposition from a Sales Advisor such as myself and a proficient memory in order to ensure product knowledge is to an optimum standard. I was also given the responsibility to train a new employee which displays the high degree of trust my employers have for me.
My educational experiences have been of great use to me from a position of form captain in Secondary School to aiding the organisation of mass celebrations in College. Responsibilities such as these have helped me to mature and take my positions seriously so that I am respected by staff. My position of English Prefect in Year 11 required a large portion of my time as I was in charge of aiding the entire English department. My interest in the Italian language has also led me to have an article I wrote regarding the exploitation of women on Italian Television published in ‘L’Italiano’ newspaper, to which I was very content to have my views expressed.
During Secondary School I also attended evening Italian classes where I was presented with ‘The Student of the Year Award’ due to my excellent standard of work. The class required me to organise my time efficiently so that other schoolwork did not suffer as a result of my extra GCSE. As a result of these classes and of my Italian parents I now speak the language fluently.#p#分頁(yè)標(biāo)題#e#
Sport and leisure also interests me and during college I decided to use this interest to do charity work for RNIB where I raised £250 and abseiled 120ft down Westminster University. I played Netball for the Harrow Netball Team and competed in the OGI UK Games for the Harrow and Wembley team where I was awarded several trophies and a gold and bronze medal for long jump and javelin.
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